So you've got a story.

Once you’ve written something – a script, an outline, a treatment, a chapter – how do you know whether it connects with the reader? If your main passion is directing, how do you ensure you have a strong story to showcase your skill? How do you spot a script’s faults when the only pair of eyes you have is your own?

That’s how: you enlist help.

You want someone to help you improve your story?

FREE NOTES: Submit your first three pages for free notes so you’ll see whether my feedback suits your needs!
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Alright – so your story is ready for someone to consult.

Only problem… you don’t know any fellow writers whose opinion you trust and who are able to give valuable, constructive feedback you can use to improve your script, outline, or treatment.

I had no one to turn to when I first dipped my toes into the world of screenwriting. I invested in books and printed screenplays to teach myself the craft. By now, printed scripts have turned into PDFs and several online courses that still teach me valuable lessons.

Most importantly, however, they brought me into contact with a bunch of incredibly creative people who – you guessed it – have become my circle of trusted script readers and consultants.

Not everyone has such great friends, though. That’s where I come in.

“Jay is a gifted and exacting script editor and reviewer. They reviewed and critiqued my tv drama script and television story bible and both their notes and editing corrections raised and improved the level of my script. Jay has a great command of English grammar and is an exacting and careful editor correcting details that I had overlooked and providing great perspectives and wider angles for any screenwriter’s film or television script! Recommended for both aspiring and seasoned writers!”
Ray Uzwyshyn Texas, USA
“I first met Jay in an international screenwriter accountability group online; one they facilitated. Their keen eye worked as a spotlight to help me focus on what worked, and what didn't. Their honest and insightful feedback continues to encourage me to make my 'good' scripts cleaner, clearer, my best.
Experienced and professional in their approach, Jay is a great script consultant. Someone I highly recommend.”
Susan Joyce Author
“Dear Jay,
Your insights and leading questions have, once again, helped me find clarity. I love your positive comments and your suggestions have led me to quite a few aha's! It is so important to be able to get feedback from someone who isn't close to the material... and the way you break it all down always makes me feel like you care about the story and characters as much as I do.
I will be sharing your services as a resource for my writing friends! Receiving notes that are actionable and include what's working... invaluable!!
Creatively yours,
Lois”
Lois Stern Writer and Voice Actress

You need constructive, actionable feedback that respects the story you wish to tell.

  • You need a second pair of eyes for your feature screenplay, TV pilot, writing sample or even your outline or treatment?
  • You need an honest and in-depth look at your script, providing you with notes and feedback you can actually use?
  • You aren’t used to handling feedback yet or simply prefer gentle honesty over brutal comments?

In short, you want someone to help? Then you found them!

I thoroughly enjoy reading other writers’ scripts and showing them what worked in my eyes and what didn’t – why included. I love offering suggestions and alternatives, not as definite answers to your project’s issues but as suggestions that will inspire you to find the perfect solution that fits your vision.

I care about the story, first and foremost. Each story is different and has its own unique needs. In me, you will find a consultant with an open mind and a genuine love for the craft, who won’t let their own preferences colour the energy they invest into your script.

I’m here for you to consult on your treatments, outlines or scripts.

To be clear, I’m not offering coverage, story analyses, or synopses/loglines.

Why? Because I’m a writer, not a reader, and think that formulaic approaches fall short when it comes to the writing process.

My philosophy

I am an attentive reader as my notes will show. That means I invest a lot of time in scripts, might even re-read them in their entirety, and will think deeply on feedback. I never speed-read through someone’s work, and my prices reflect that.

Or they used to. 

I have wrestled with the question whether to charge for feedback or not since developing this services page on my website. You can follow my personal journey in my blog post on the topic, but the long and short of it is:

  • Creativity should be encouraged and accessible for everybody regardless of economic status.
  • Us writers are a community and as such should encourage and help one another. Charging for my feedback makes me feel like I am part of the exact  opposite of what I deem ‘right’, namely exploitative industry monetizing the ambitions of fellow writers. That’s also why I am a proud member of  Scriptrevolution, and hav yet to put any of my work up on Blacklist.
  • While I am not what one would call financially secure, I have a certain level of privilege on many fronts. Sure, being paid for feedback would be  wonderful, but I can earn that money elsewhere.

Conclusion:  I will not charge fellow writers for providing simple feedback.

Of course my time is limited, so this way I can’t give notes to everyone asking for them within a reasonable time period. Patience will be the price  you pay, I  guess?

However, if you feel the desire to tip me, I’d be incredibly grateful. You could also join my Patreon and provide continuous motivation to me on a monthly basis. ONLY, and I can’t stress this enough, only if you are comfortable making that investment.

For anyone interested in my services as a consultant, meaning me taking an active role in helping improve your work, I’m happy to help as well. Get in touch for prices!

Prices

ServicePrice
Outline, Treatment (under 20 pages)free
TV pilot, half hourfree
TV pilotfree
Feature scripts free
Ongoing mentorship and re-readsnegotiable
Sensitivity read and editnegotiable
Proofreading onlynegotiable

All prices shown are before taxes.

 

Free sample feedback
If you’re uncertain,  simply submit your first three pages for free notes so you’ll see whether my feedback style suits your needs.

Feedback
Detailed notes within the PDF of the script plus an extra write-up (about 2 pages minimum) with my overarching thoughts, suggestions and praise. My goal is to be constructive and motivating, after all!

Long-term mentorship
I’ve had the honour of helping fellow writers in the long-term, bouncing ideas, developing their scripts, providing feedback, all in a nurturing, safe and positive environment. If you’re looking for a ‘partner in crime’, maybe I’m the one for you! Due to time constraints, I am not able to offer this  free-of-charge for anyone other than my close friends. If you’re interested, simply get in touch :)

Trans* and representation-focused script consultant
As a trans*, queer person with a degree in anthropology and film studies, I have a keen eye for representation in scripts and projects. At the same time, I am fully aware of my privileges – white privilege, passing privilege as cis female, thin privilege in a weight-sigmatized culture.
The result? A unique perspective that will benefit any script intended for an  international or Western-centric market.

My goal is to help create a more inclusive, diverse, global media landscape, and consulting on projects is one step on this long, complicated journey.

FAQ – Frequently Asked Questions

Free sample feedback can take up to three business days. Full notes depend on my workload at the time.

If you need a quicker turnaround, let me know and I’ll see what I can do!

Yes. No hidden costs, no “I gave you great advice, so now pay me”. You receive feedback when I can manage to make the time and I don’t expect payment.

If you want to give me a tip or support me by becoming a Patreon, you’re very welcome to,  though :)

First of all, I am so grateful you wish to tip me! Only do it if you’re comfortably  able to, though.

The easiest way in this day and age is through PayPal: paypal.me/jaypendragon

Alternatively,  you could check out my Patreon page and consider to pledge monthly, thus providing continuous motivation!

I proofread scripts to the best of my ability while I read. If you wish to just have someone check for errors, get in touch and we’ll find a solution :)

That really depends on my current workload, I’m afraid.

If you’re preparing for a deadline, let me know and I see what I can do, alright?

If you wish faster feedback, just say so – I prefer to sleep on my thoughts and process my feedback before sending it off, but I’m willing to be quicker if required.

I’ve written, directed and produced two short films, optioned one original feature script and am on my third paid rewrite gig. In 2019, I was also honoured to be asked to judge a youth film festival in Bavaria, Germany.

Though I believe that ANYONE – and I do mean anyone – who enjoys consuming media is “qualified”  to give feedback. We’re all just viewers, at the end of the day. Films and television is such a subjective art form and whoever claims that one needs a certain education is an elitist who is just out for your money. (Please, RUN FROM THOSE POEPLE.)

Interested?

Then don’t hesitate to reach out! No tedious contact form, simply shoot me an email =)
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